Fun In The Sun

This is my recount I have been working on.  I hope to get ideas on what I did well and how I can write better.

I was learning to begin each sentences with capital letter and end with full stop. I am trying to start my sentences in different ways.

Family Trip

My family and I went to Ngunguru on monday for a family holiday. This was in the school holidays.

First  we were excited because we were having fun and were playing on the motorbikes. I was happy being on the Motorbike   it felt   like I was on the  washing machine  i was Sitting  with my dad and was wearing a helmet  Later that  day

rode the  horses  And the horses were brown and we were having fun and one of the horses , was gold and it look good and my horses was happy to. Riding the  horses it was cool and my dad and the tribe and were at the beach and were having fun at the beach and we were going home and the, next morning we had  breakfast and we all  run outside . And it was cool and me and my  mum went to the  beach and .We were happy and it was cool because  we were having a happy time it was cool. I was going to papa in ngunguru and i was happy .And my papa was happy to and were helping my papa do the lawns and were  running  to the door and we  hug   my papa.Aand were  happy and my dad went. To get the Lawn mower  and were .happy  and we Help  my papa and were  finished the lawn and were happy because  we  finished and my dad was happy to and they were happy  because  were having fun it was cool.

Later that  day we had  a kai and it was yum and I went  for a shower and then i went to bed  and i had a big bed and i did not want to share with my sister because She is a hoha and i don’t  like her and i have my own bed at home in,awarua  it is cool sleeping by myself.

What I like about that day it was fun and were happy that my papa was happy it was fun and my dad was happy to and went to the K.F.C and had big kai my mum was happy and my whanau and my papa my dad  is cool and he is my dad and I love him.